Model Senate
Project Description:
In this project "Model Senate" we learned about how the United States goverment works along with our sentators and the problems they face. We learned about 3 problems being college debt, climate change, and immigration. For multiple weeks we learned about these three issues and their details. Once we learned about the issues we got our sentor roles and some of us got specialty roles that exsist in the senate. After all of our research and writing of the bills we got to vote on legislation.
In this project "Model Senate" we learned about how the United States goverment works along with our sentators and the problems they face. We learned about 3 problems being college debt, climate change, and immigration. For multiple weeks we learned about these three issues and their details. Once we learned about the issues we got our sentor roles and some of us got specialty roles that exsist in the senate. After all of our research and writing of the bills we got to vote on legislation.
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Reflection for Model Senate
Three Writing Goals
One thing that I want to improve in my writing is the flow of each sentence and how each paragraph flows in the end. The reason I want to improve this is to overall strengthen my arguments. The one major way I saw of doing this is to be able to have a paragraph that flows and is easy to understand. One example of me failing to do create a flow is in my Seminar reflection. I stumbled from idea to idea at the end and beginning of each paragraph. This made it very choppy to read and when others reviewed my writing they didn’t completely understand what I was trying to convey. Ways I can combat this problem are reading my paper out load after it is written and have peers read my paper. I believe that reading a paper out load as if it was a speech can make sure it doesn’t come out rough as well as gets the idea out. My peers will always be able to help with another perspective and make revisions.
Another Part of my writing that I would like to improve is thesis structure and making sure that it is included. I have always struggled to explain my paper within 1 or 2 sentences so the reader knows what to expect. Skipping the thesis has been my solution in the past and I can no longer do that. An example of me doing this is again in my seminar reflection and even in some of my chemistry labs from last year. On the grading rubric for my seminar reflection of highly cynical people Lori mentions that having no thesis “leads to a lack of clarity”. One way I can solve my thesis problem is to write my entire paper and then come back to wrap the paper together. Another way I can solve this is to take to Lori and find resources about thesis constructing to help me succeed
My final piece of writing that needs to be improved is my analysis of my evidence/quotes. Overall I am fairly good at finding the evidence to use and taking good quotes from the text to support my ideas. The problem arises when I try to explain why it supports my ideas or to connect back to my main idea. A prime example of this is in an evidence and analysis based paper like my seminar reflection. When I quoted a sentence from “The Habits of Highly Cynical People” in my third paragraph I only analysis the text in one sentence. This quote connected my ideas together very well but lacked the writing in the paragraph to close the idea up and solidify it. A way I can solve this lack of analyzation is to ask myself why this text works. Write down some ideas of why it supports my ideas, then write those thoughts into the paper until they fit. Multiple revisions of a paper will help as well to help support my ideas and the evidence I brought to the table.