College Essay
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How my revising went
Being the first time ever I wrote a college essay I was quick nervous as well as had a lot of room to improve. I started out with 1 draft and created my final copy after three attempts. Between these three attempts I improved one part of my writing that has grown me immensely. This skill was being able to become more personable with a story and show how I felt and reacted in a situation. A quote to show this is “As day one rolled around I was very scared and wasn’t sure if I was ready for the commitment I had just made.” After writing this and bringing into one of my peer group reviews the only feedback I received was Write more like I act and explain myself out in the situations. I then took this sentence out and refined that piece into “The hot July sun gleamed off of my sun glasses, shinning into the faces of my awkward coworkers. My eyes scanned over everyone looking for critiques and judgment. No kindness existed until a girl with wild hair cracked an inappropriate joke and we all cracked up.” This writing didn’t just out of no were although that would have been great. I had to take the feedback I had been given and grow from it. I started to tell the story in how I had saw the day go down and every little detail I had thought. Then I took my piece of writing and added and subtracted pieces until it sounded more like me. Once had completed this I went back for more revisions from Lori. After all revisions had been done I ended up with a piece of writing that sounded more like me and will hopefully impress the next person to read it.